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Hunt (Free verse) by cobalt

Greener than the leaves irridescent heads glint against a dun river's shimmery lap, lulled Instantly uncradled, slivers of blue flash from unfurling wings burst heavenward as shot shatters silence in the reeds He sits silent, blinded awaits the fall

poetandknowit 18-Oct-02/2:22 PM
Some of the images are a bit confusing. "greener than leaves" hunting season is in the fall when the leaves are changing, so this loses me. why is he blinded. Did he hit himself with the recoil? "uncradled slivers of blue
shoot heavenward" is confusing. I think I know what you are saying, but it is not necessarily coming across.




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