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First Kiss... (Free verse) by loneshadow29

I sit here remembering the night of my first kiss I was afraid to touch her the fear overwhelming then as if some force controlled my very being my arms began to wrap around her I held her so close to me our hearts beating in unison soon, as if by instinct I softly caressed her cheek then in one gentle motion I touched her lips with mine even on that cold February night warmth of love sprang from within my heart racing for dear life my mind reeling, overcome by the love brought forth by those few moments I saw her gentle smile then became lost in her eyes oh those beautiful eyes shining bright like sapphire stars I couldn't help but realize how much love I hold for her then, once again I tried my best to show all of my love with a kiss I remember that moment as if it were only a moment ago and I long for that day to return

Christof 18-Oct-02/6:30 AM
I don't think you should lean back on the phrase 'indescribable emotion' - it's the poet's job to describe it, otherwise how can the reader feel it?




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