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Jerk ?? Circle (Free verse) by horus8

Valentine candy Warmed to mush There's my lover To much blush Murder tools litter The dry dim abode My hands are crying They want to try Sneaky tweak freak Last but fast Helmeted soldier Hankin half-mast Tingling tiny Trinkets to toast Tornado-tattooed Tater-tots to trace Tilted twisting tacos This Thursday Towards twilight Then toss Tuesday's tuxedo Tenderly taken Tutoring Todd The twinky-taster She wants to hurt me Because she loves me Abuse becomes symbolic I read the Braille On your face Even in my social blindness Insisting only On temporary fondness Resisting thrusts The container busts Our savings spilled loans and trusts Spreading uncounted Like bengied chickens Let's do Geomancy For dear Caesar February children Mostly my siblings Pisces lover Underneath covers Red-light bathed Two faces blooming One is trying The other dying Chocolate coats the truth Do martinis attract vermouth? Masturbating with Dr. Ruth Murderers still love In their blunted Lurching strokes The knife is plastic and many-toothed I need that and a spork For my salad eating Pyre of fire We're all soon to be casualties Of a lover's consumed desire To finish quick and roll over Faster! Good boy! Now play dead

royalflesh 16-Oct-02/2:44 AM
devilishly and eau de toilette wrenching...was the soul's conquest greater alive (lived or dead) Where does this lead? hopefully it's just the pain of a beginning; sadly stated and brilliantly composed...I stand with a white flag and surrender to your words, my friend. It's about helpless hope in a distant-ly thought-out mind-less realities. I find it invigorating - like the conquest of becoming or taking over someone else's body or mind. Eve gave the apple to Adam - or was it the other way around? Who knows for certain...the serpent was around. You do good work and always look forward to your thoughts. You sir, wear a cloak around your shoulders...mysterious, mystical creature of another time. Luckily - the beauty shines through this thickness and prowless nature...strong enough to capture the essence of what is important and real in our world of un-realities and superflous flooding. 8




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