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Every Day in Every Way (Free verse) by nentwined

my mind, it is changing -- not into another, but new things arranging in prismatic lines. a new dawn is dawning and causing expansion, while the old mind is yawning with prismatic dreams. a butterfly emerging -- twilight's last blooming, with vitality surging and prismatic wings. twilight's last blooming is but one of many, with many more looming; more prismatic beings.

anonymous 17-May-02/2:19 AM
i really like the first verse, but the rest just feels too unnatural...




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