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Bleeding V2 (Free verse) by INTRANSIT

Hoooweee! What a scam. What a deal! The line smoothes his Armani necktie pointing to the fine printed showroom billboard. "And there'll never be another deal like this one"! Meanwhile, his cronies finesse our finances as he leads us to the sinker pencils freshly leadened to carry us to the bottom. And let's not forget the hook, teeth shiney clean, who showed us the little guy across the street and what kind of junk he was selling. What an opening gambit. What happens when this contract goes full term? Oh, we'll still be here. A fish, strung up with all the others attracting bears.

god'swife 12-Oct-02/5:14 PM
The last image is the prize winner here. You probably know that already. I don't care for the hook line and sinker, except that it ties in with the last stanza. Could the cronies be fishing instead of butchering?




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