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Safe Distance, 10-10-02 (Free verse) by Frass

Last night a man who worked for my firm stood near his car, pumping gas in Manassas and was shot dead, in cold blood from a safe distance the sniper thought. The distance a coward uses for his aims while searching through the heart of himself, a well brimming with self-pity, for another reason to hate all of us. The innocent the victims of such hate are not distant from our prayers and thoughts; but, there is no distance safe enough the sniper knows that our justice will find him.

god'swife 10-Oct-02/2:38 PM
Well, someones been doing their exercises. I love the way this piece looks, and also "pumping gas in Manassas" the last lines at the end of S1 & S2 should be eliminated. Lines 3,4, & 5 in S2 need tiobe re-worked slightly. S3 needs to be re-worked. Sounds like a hurried after-thought.




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