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The Thought Of It (Free verse) by Christof

I thought: Who would leave a child outside On a night like this? As its howl curled out And curdled the air Between us and the baby We were thinking of. You must go, you said, and help. The howl cracked into yelping And we knew that the sound Was a fox in a trap And its cry tied us up With our unconceived child And the stars and the fox All prisoners.

Christof 10-Oct-02/7:36 AM
I'm not sure if this is an English/American thing, because to my ear the cadence works fine. I could change it to 'planning' or 'imagining' but then again that might lead your mind forward. Perhaps reinstating the question mark will cement the different clauses more effectively. Let's give it a go.




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