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it's slow time (Free verse) by silvertongueddevil

it's slow time flatline for that other heart, not the pump, but the pilot. not the pilot, the navigator. not the navigator, the cartographer. not the cartographer, the surveyor. not the surveyor, the explorer. not the explorer, the dreamer, that other heart.

aduren 14-May-02/9:51 AM
other heart/same heart...... you found the root there's a dreamer in each of them... they are that thing and the dreamer, too. nice...although I don't really get your language in the first 2 lines: creativity does cycle in and out...yes. but, does it altogether flatline? maybe another metaphor? something circular... or resting... maybe the landscape?




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