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the lips of your mouth (Free verse) by silvertongueddevil

the lips of your mouth are of a colour which cannot be found in the flowers or the skies it cannot be seen in stones bird feathers beetle wings the eyes of fishes it does not appear in any of the art that litters the world your lips - my wish is that you might lift them to me one day

anonymous 14-May-02/9:32 AM
first of all, "The lips of your mouth" is a tad redundant, don't you think? I see what you're going for and it's nice... but it just doesn't work. And s3 - if you're trying to elevate and show some sort of awe for the color of her lips, then don't compare it with art that LITTERS the world, for fuck's sake. Compare it to something lovelier than bird feathers, etc....




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