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Cheap Thrills (Free verse) by Owner of the Sky

I would like to meet God. Where do I get a priority number? Is the line going to be long? I'd hate to think, I'd have to wait for hours. But then again, I do that For a roller coaster ride. When I have my conversation with Him, Will it only last two minutes? Is God A cheap thrill?

nentwined 1-Oct-02/5:12 AM
this comes across a little too simply for my tastes. i see where pnk's complaining about the show-don't tell.

However, I wouldn't be surprised if that's the intent, making a cheap thrill out of this poem entitled cheap thrill about a cheap thrill.

Which would elevate it some -- a really good cheap thrill.




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