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Gemini (Free verse) by susie

I was born a Gemini And I know my evil "twin" She's sly and self protective She's underneath my skin Though I prefer myself to her She does not let me choose She emerges from my consciousness A dangerous young muse She creeps along beside me Refusing to be shaken She knows that love's a risk And that risks are not worth taking She'll sacrifice her body To protect her heart And when truth comes up empty She knows just where to start I'm keeping her at bay for now But I will never know When it is she'll next arrive Or which way she will go.

Nicholas Jones 29-Sep-02/4:42 AM
This is good, the discussion of differing parts of one's own mind. Not sure about rhyming shaken and taking, though, but I like the idea of sacrificing the body to save the heart.




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