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Never get it right (Free verse) by Mutant_X

I sometimes get to think, that maybe if you hold me once again tight we can make it right hold each others all night i miss your touch though i know i'm askin for so much that maybe we can make it thru the place n time maybe you'de be mine and i'de be yours get lost in each other's souls i sometimes wonder why did we have to fight when all i really wanted to say is i love you and why everything we did or said just hurts us more we never know what for it's life, which we never get it right.

INTRANSIT 27-Sep-02/6:20 PM
Both pieces need less telling and more showing. Recommendation: Find poetry that you like and read as much as you can. You'll develop a better feel for the written word.7




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