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West Sands, late afternoon in winter (Free verse) by Nicholas Jones

I feel as if I am nowhere, As if I am the space around my own body And even that is barren. The view out to the estaury Reminds me of myself And that I am barely here - Just surrounded by Sky beach and sea. I look at my reflection In the moving waters, And laugh at the idea Of jumping in after myself.

Christof 27-Sep-02/3:40 AM
This is your best yet. I love the idea of barely being there, just being a space defined by the environment around you. And you end it light-heartedly. Bonza. (but a typo - 'estuary' - don't worry about it).




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