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Fraternity (Free verse) by Christof

On leave, cleaning boots. The acrid tang Of polish and sweat and efficiency rang Like a bell as you sat with your big lips pursed To watch your work and the sunlight burst On the steel-capped toes. Discipline, you said, That's how the army keeps control. One scuffed knee, only five years old I had to concur with a glamorous brother So very much older, so very much tougher, With hair as glassy as a burnished floor. You said: they'll follow you everywhere Will disorder and chaos. That wisdom shared You took yourself off as I marched behind To the end of the path and in my mind To the glorious fields of the enemy dead. Now I see you maybe once a year And then I see me, perfectly clear, My thin-lipped smile, my untidy tie, In the bright-buffed shine and the tight-laced eye Of the shoes that you wear when you sell door-to-door.

horus8 26-Sep-02/2:24 PM
brought a tear to my eye, my trust in you has grown stout once again..10! HORUS8 PRIZE FOR the APPLE OF HIS EYE, AND THE ENDLESS POINTLESS SHOE FILL STEREOTYPE.. you just might be a dead great famous composer yet.




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