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Taffy (Free verse) by knickytoy

We would begin with wishes. Bubbling up, as in boiling sugar; The hot, glossy bubbles of an unformed sweet, beautiful, but looking nothing like salt water taffy, Are pulled, broken, stretched and dulled, So dull they become reality And no one is really happy.

poetandknowit 24-Sep-02/4:30 PM
Pretty good stuff. Are you really z's friend or are you z. Do you garden at night? Are you prettier than she? I need to know these things before we go on. Anyway, minus the fact I tripped up over the caps on each line except for beautiful, which I thought was unnecessarily blatant, this is a fine piece.




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