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Trespasser at the Men's Bathing Pond (Free verse) by Christof

Without permission you dropped a stone Into my pond. Like flesh on bone The water wrapped and sucked around Until it drowned But only a ripple, a tiny wave And a ripple betrayed its grave. A pinprick in the fibrous part Of cortex where desires start Even now spread out to claim My entire brain But gently, mind, a supple wave So softly sharp and slyly brave.

vulcan 24-Sep-02/8:33 AM
Hi Christof!you try to pierce into my psyche!I was inspired to write "a man of the world",when I recalled H.G.Wells'"A door in the wall".have you read that?one of the best short stories I've ever read.(of course the Priest and the ring was my own invention!)-A 10 for your poem!




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