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Taffy (Free verse) by knickytoy

We would begin with wishes. Bubbling up, as in boiling sugar; The hot, glossy bubbles of an unformed sweet, beautiful, but looking nothing like salt water taffy, Are pulled, broken, stretched and dulled, So dull they become reality And no one is really happy.

<~> 24-Sep-02/7:54 AM
especially when it sticks to one's teeth. ah, the sweetness of sugared wishes. maybe lose the 'in' in line 2? welcome to the site, knickytoy. i know yer going to like it here.




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