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Here In The Heart of Amber (Free verse) by Lenore

Tears that heaven knows when had sucked the fire of some forgotten sun, and kept it through centuries of gloom; Still glowing-- Here in the heart of Amber. This glittering armour in the sun, glinting ripples, one by one, come shining across my face where fossils keep in destined place-- Here in the heart of Amber. Time's story flowing by, Forever sweet to flesh and eye, Forever new and never done. In golden drops death and life are one-- Here in the heart of Amber.

Frass 23-Sep-02/10:56 AM
Right on, Lenore. Would "death, life are one" help rhythm? Also, do you want to capitalize Amber, suggesting a woman's name, or leave as lower case, and thus up to the reader's imagination?




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