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Eight (Free verse) by amateurR

He took me there There. Where- Good quality cardboard Hides Bad stuff. A blow pop? Some candy, maybe? Oh, I know you like it. Orange is your favorite. Come on now Seven-year olds- Can do better than that You're eight. Big is bad Small is good Big in small- Is even better. He took me there.

god'swife 19-Sep-02/4:26 PM
This lacks compassion. It's scary which is good but you need to develop your characters more. Read 'No Angel Came"




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