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A HANGMAN'S MOANING (Free verse) by Dhanesh M Kumar

Is there anyone who sees my mind Alas doing for the sake of bread; The justice perhaps may have a thousand reasons to make him stranglehold, surmounted my knot. That final stare varies, person to person Often making my mind so brittle, agonized faces many I have seen, But so penetrating is the beaming smile! Me the tool and he the sufferer, Is there anyone who sees my mind?

daniella 22-Feb-15/7:24 AM
i love your thoughts. they are in the right place and the poem works on some levels. keep engineering the phrases. and perhaps punctuation is needed, for example:
Alas doing, for the sake of bread
no?




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