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The Spell(Alice part I) (Lyric) by alvinb

My bright blue skies have faded My world unsaturated and it feels like it's out of hue.. The vividness has turned gray Gone are the colors of May nothing left but blue.. It used to shine so bright Surrounded by bright light I'm sinking deep inside Sinking deep in my own lies Now it's hard for me to move My screws are turning loose Feels like my soul was shattered.. I lay in darkness, my friend I see memories I've forsaken All of that is you... It used to shine so bright but now it's dark outside It's buried deep inside Buried deep in my own lies...

SupremeDreamer 11-Feb-13/3:36 PM
This is not a lyric. It takes me barely more that 30 seconds to sing this. There's no fucking chorus. As free verse I'd be inclined to give this a four. As a "lyric"? 1.




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