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Late Song (Lyric) by nypoet22

This is a late song A much too late song A song about if only I had known if only I had known if only I had known if only I had known But it's a late song A love and hate song The difference between the two is timing This is a late song A failure to communicate song A song about the space that's grown shoulders on the pillow silence on the phone the space between us has grown Whenever I pine for you to be mine I remember what my papa used to say You can have anything you want but you cant have everything you want at the same time After what you said you can't have me you can't have me you can't have me After what you did you can't have me This is a late song A past our expiration date song A song about the chances now they're blown the chances now they're blown the chances now they're blown the chances now they're blown But it's a late song A sliced-up heart left steaming on the plate song An ending owing to too much two-timing This is a late song A far too late song You got no need to hear me moan, "I'm so sorry" ain't gonna cry no more no i won't cry no more you ain't gonna hear me cry no more Too damn late song

nypoet22 28-Mar-12/10:07 PM
your constructive criticism was considered in the re-write. here's the result, performed with guitar and violin:

http://youtu.be/pw_9K3VZZoo




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