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dps 2 - new ver. (Free verse) by decadentlaurel

i gaze across the room i watch silently two sparkling blue droplets answer my call my view falls to the barren floor carpe diem i remember words conjuring in my mind like spells of the olden days oh captain, my captain thoughts from the back of my head i long to look up to leer upon the sunset where the blue of her eyes meets gold flowing in every direction such beauty awaits before me still all i see is the ground

Christof 18-Sep-02/8:05 AM
Version 1 is much better than this - simpler, more honest, less 'poetic'.




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