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you are the bell and i am the dog (Free verse) by silvertongueddevil

you are the bell and i am the dog. on the street corner your silhouette rings an exquisite note, wave, that mutes the traffic and makes me wonder which morning, which afternoon, which forgotten sight of you burnt this trace, unintentional response. the dog in someone's experiment wants to keep the thrill because that is the reward.

david 11-May-02/12:17 PM
The metaphor put forth in the opening line sounds contrived and too forthward to fit with the language of the rest of the piece. I'd suggest omitting the first line altogether.




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