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lovely (Free verse) by pink_punk_kisses87

As I watch you sleep I look at your lovely brown hair. I gaze at how graceful your hands lay. I touch your soft pale cheeks with my fingertips. I look at how your eyes gently fall upon the other. I run my hand through your fine limp hair. I smell the sent of your sweet light skin and fall in love with you more. I kiss your salty full lips and then stand up and at your open coffin and smile.

[mojo] 17-Sep-02/10:52 AM
The phrase "limp hair" made me feel slightly nauseous. It has to be said that this is an improvement on your last offering. I'll keep an eye out for your next.3.




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