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lovely (Free verse) by pink_punk_kisses87

As I watch you sleep I look at your lovely brown hair. I gaze at how graceful your hands lay. I touch your soft pale cheeks with my fingertips. I look at how your eyes gently fall upon the other. I run my hand through your fine limp hair. I smell the sent of your sweet light skin and fall in love with you more. I kiss your salty full lips and then stand up and at your open coffin and smile.

Limness 17-Sep-02/9:53 AM
necrophiliac. "A Rose for Emily" and one for pink-punk-kisses as well! Hurrah! still, it's evocative. Graceful-ly (you need the -ly). And, what 'other' do the eyes gently fall upon? Aren't they closed?




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