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Cinematic Indulgence (Free verse) by nentwined

Five miles of desert, prepped carefully, swept, kept smooth and "Hollywood"; clouds seeded by the very best for a two hour, one-take, no-cut down-pour of action packed walking amidst the rain; plot to be ret-conned in, explained by fans. Failure will be lemonade; drunk deeply with a twist of gin: sabotage could very well make the film.

Dovina 23-Jul-08/4:16 PM
Pardon my butting in, but it really ought to go somewhere beyond "failure" in the last verse. For starters dump the two semicolons and the quotes, also the colon. Cool if you're making movies now; if so, a bit more process please.




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