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Killer Gap (Free verse) by T. Jonathron Remp

Row after row of cotton not to be easily forgotten. Perfectly designed pants, straps, suits and hats. Colors kaleidoscopic, tropic themes, handy pockets. No infantile clowns, cakes, ponies nor rockets. From cowlick to toes, man makes the clothes! I spin to my wife, the producer of life. Conceive, we must, make a baby out of dust! Conceive: So that we may put a baby in this sleeve! Just imagine these garments, running through our apartment Complimenting our cabinets and upholstery, O, Baby, get close to me! Bring me an heir, a crawling mannequin so fair! My dear, my dear, before you come into my lap, Be sure to open an account with Baby Gap

nentwined 26-Jun-08/8:29 PM
The first stanza and three quarters really work, though I wouldn't expect them too. You're losing it for me where you break from the form and rhythm you've set up ((any form is tenuous and has a lot to prove about itself... and when you drop it, if that's not intrinsically meaningful, ...))

Interesting, though.




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