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dps (Free verse) by decadentlaurel

i look at her she is reading i look still she looks i see the ground carpe diem i remember oh captain, my captain thoughts from the back of my head will i look again will our eyes meet will my heart flutter never to try never to jump never to fly waiting before me sits such beauty still all i see is the ground

nentwined 16-Sep-02/11:23 PM
I don't understand how "i to look away again" fits in. I don't know what exactly you've changed, but my only stumbling block at the moment is "i to look away again"




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