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Shiver (Free verse) by Skamper

brittle hands grasp the meaning behind his undertaker’s smile she labours in the loosening he's giving chances existances competing breath saccharine sickening fingers driven free the aromatic pleasures of the dead creating monuments he tongues her skin issue slick dripping cold walk comforts trailing patterns set by the unforseen he finds her beauty stilling

Skamper 28-Dec-07/11:25 PM
I wanted to be spare - create the energy of serial killing, the need and driving ambition of it, as coldly as possible.

The line is 'creating monuments' not moments.




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