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Suicide Note(I Blame You) (Free verse) by alvinb

Thus the water flows And so my blood goes For as the wind blows Like my love, lost So there goes My blood flows Streaming to those What I lost Bye, bye Darkened sky I see myself So up high I guess its goodbye Wipe my tears, let them dry Because you made me cry Now I’m flying to the sky

x0lovelylarnx0 14-Dec-07/12:06 PM
I'm just curious, but when you say your flying to the sky do you mean Heaven, cause last time I checked people who commit suicide don't go to heaven??? Otherwise the poem is decent, but I think the last 2 lines need to be changed.




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