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Missing - You (Free verse) by Skamper

a little out of breath a little far from sane closer to the stage farther from the rain a quiet corner weeps a quiet whisper sighs closer to the grave farther from the lies a secret life is lived a secret smile is asked farther from the play closer to the act in dimming of the lights in closing of the door your shadow will remain I always wanted more

Dovina 27-Nov-07/8:43 PM
It has a good rhythm and a good subtle message. Would be nice if the Word 2 pattern continued: little, quiet, secret, . . . rain/sane rhyme seems a bit forced. Verse 2 is my favorite. The last line is disappointing and vague, seems unsupported.




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