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Missing - You (Free verse) by Skamper

a little out of breath a little far from sane closer to the stage farther from the rain a quiet corner weeps a quiet whisper sighs closer to the grave farther from the lies a secret life is lived a secret smile is asked farther from the play closer to the act in dimming of the lights in closing of the door your shadow will remain I always wanted more

INTRANSIT 27-Nov-07/7:40 AM
allow me to continue being nitty. -and- closing of the door?
I'm only trying to find ways to improve this- if that is even possible. I think it pretty much does what it's supposed to.




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