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Trapped in a horseshoe (Free verse) by INTRANSIT

She spins and pops your top serves you cold and deflects the bold with a smile. She's friendly on tap, just for a little while. She works without seam; buddy, confidant, quarterback of the linear team. She likes to mix it up and keep things alive,while hiding her stirring deep deep inside. She can send your troubles away, a cure for the blues. Washes them right down your throat, boilermaker smooth. Dignity intact she still gets undressed by her audience under every nighttime sun. Yet she is the captive one.

Christof 27-Nov-07/6:18 AM
No smoothing! I like this with its internal rhymes, the tripping rhythm, the abrupt caesurae. Stops you getting too comfortable, just like the barmaid.




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