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In the berth (Free verse) by INTRANSIT

Some nights the warm reaching wind rocks my truck hushshshshsh hushshshshsh Sometimes a train passes beating its' open boxcar song. blumblum blumblum blumblum blumblum Some nights I lie in the plushness of the contented cat underneath the hood. And in the just right sleeping weather I leave my curtains open and look up.

Skamper 26-Nov-07/6:16 PM
the 'cat' gives a two fold image...you need to keep that in. I like the image... :)

Not usually a favourite of mine - the 'sound effects' but you played it well




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