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Death and the black dog (Free verse) by Caducus

a black dog followed me when i stopped it sat whimpering. I lost it by my house it found me by a grave whimpering. A black dog barked at me foaming omens where she stood holding me. A black dog lay with me I lost it with hope it gnarls in its sleep but i have awoken to blurred parents whimpering.

INTRANSIT 22-Nov-07/12:45 PM
I sense expectation of death in the first two stanzas. Um, I'm not going to comment just yet. I think there's more you want to say. Let it ferment, C.




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