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lovely (Free verse) by pink_punk_kisses87

As I watch you sleep I look at your lovely brown hair. I gaze at how graceful your hands lay. I touch your soft pale cheeks with my fingertips. I look at how your eyes gently fall upon the other. I run my hand through your fine limp hair. I smell the sent of your sweet light skin and fall in love with you more. I kiss your salty full lips and then stand up and at your open coffin and smile.

god'swife 16-Sep-02/5:42 PM
Who is this person? Start there. mother, sister, friend. Watch can become so many other things; attend, regard, mark, glimpse, etc... use a thesaurus it's your best friend. You'll hear some idiots spout stupidities about the illegitimacy of using one. Don't listen. All good poets use them. Infact try to find an old used thesaurus that isn't organized alphabetically. Take to reading it. That's an education.
" I mark your sleep. The lovely brown of your hair./ Your hands like..... It takes hours upon hours to work out a poem. The ones that come spontaneously are gifts, and have little to do witht he writers craft. Don't give up.




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