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Stroke It! (Free verse) by Skamper

I want to brush sweetly dabble madly create something Astounding! I want to be EVERYTHING So - bards shall sing me angels weep blood for me I want the world to know I'm secretly Van Gogh disguised as picasso

INTRANSIT 7-Nov-07/6:53 AM
The word -could- gives the bards the option of doing so. "We could sing this. Nah, lets play Jarts."

There may be an even better/more active/forceful word than -will or -want to. (not the first line)

Give me more details about s-1-3. (Everything) is too broad a specrum, I think. Try to narrow it.

Like I said to dovina, It'sa jumping off point.




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