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Winter Moon (Free verse) by Musicman

crisp clear night stills the winter moon bittersweet old memories loom time marks the shadows’ walk of barren trees and farmers’ stalks last lonely leaf tumbles to the lake serpentine swell marks the water’s wake a reflection of her presence quakes winter moon’s white shimmer

Dovina 24-Oct-07/11:39 AM
This is good. I think the telling "bittersweet" opener can go. "the serpentine swell" - drop "the" I think. Actually, take a look at all the articles in verse 2.

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