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Head On (Lyric) by Bachus

Head lights, and Amphetamines Desert dried translucency's God, isn't it a novelty? This gap in coming down. Pomegranate finger tips Listen to the tearing strips Time, and physics, losing grip Perhaps, that was my mind? Steering wheel's, so round and tight Falling deep in love with nights Left alone to count the strikes Of lightning at the ground. I'd better keep my eyes to road Sleep's begun its great erode Upon my will it does decode What I cannot rewind. I'll miss the way it looked from there Orion, Pleiades, and the bear I watch my life disappear All sparks, in turn, subside.

xyz 22-Oct-07/1:03 AM
It looks like this may be an intelligent poem...I can't tell. I'll have to rate and review it at another time so that I can give a fair assessment.




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