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HATE (Free verse) by forsaken'sbigbro

Live to hate and Hate to live On the outside I'm so quiet So peaceful No hate Only love To give But on the inside I'm loud So ready for war Full of hate With no love To give I just can't tell With one is the true me I run into the darkness To get away from myself I need to hide from myself But I can't be alone Cause I'm scared of myself But I can't handle people I hate with a passion But I don't like to be alone Some one tell me Whats wrong with me But I'll hate any answer You give me Some times I wonder If theres any hope For someone with so much HATE

xyz 22-Oct-07/12:58 AM
This is better than alot of the other shit I've been reading on this site. I think if you work on some of the lines you could improve this quite a bit. I like your honesty and openness.




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