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The Friendship Storm (Free verse) by x0lovelylarnx0

On with life our friends will go Embarking on a new road Fluffy White Storm clouds cluster in the sky Blocking the sun from shining down on their lives Love hides in the dark rain The Lovers remain separate as the storm reigns Lighting Shatters the heart in half Thunder thrashes out on it's soul mate The storm blows over Leaving in a rush to tear another lost heart into shreds The sun pours it's love and warmth onto the Victim's wretched luck The paths connect back at the start Now these lovers must never part

Skamper 13-Oct-07/9:28 PM
this is very bland - you need to drop such overused phrases and take what is in your head and write it in your own words...don't worry about what other people rate your work, it's not that important...honestly you seem to want to play to the masses instead of just playing.




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