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Plug my Phone In
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jessicazee
He's teaching school now, the elements the chart says, waking together coffee, chemistry ten morning minutes sacred before the bell rings two alarms chime on we parking ticket ourselves, your plug fits in mine
Ranger
20-Sep-07/1:29 AM
The second stanza is perfect (perhaps change the position of 'sacred' as our trucker suggests). "He's teaching school now" wants editing, in my opinion and the last line is very abrupt. Maybe that's what you were after though?
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