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Come Now (Free verse) by Joi

Come now Go into the night Walking about Feeling the calm The stillness in the night Lets take a walk Feel the rain on your cheeks Smell the rain of the ground Hear all the voices That nature makes Voices of the night Sounds of the leaves Falling from the trees Joining the others Senses awakened Joy to be felt Peace of mind Numb to all Come now Lets walk along The sweet smell of wood The sent A night to remember.

richa 5-Sep-07/12:22 PM
Better than your last. Still a lot of you repeating yourself to no particular effect. Also numb is a terrible word choice in a poem by a grownup.




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