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The Raw Vegan Potluck (Free verse) by peaceseeker

Chocolate truffles made of secret bliss-inducing ingredients, hooking every taster . . . Sunflower sprouts lush and full still rooted in peat moss and dripping large black oval seeds. . . Salads with slices of tomatoes glistening with delectable oils resting on beds of greens and onions. . . The old man with long hair and overalls, carrying in a flat of wheatgrass. . . The organizer with the GMO Free Zone sign to show to all and discuss. . . The four month-old baby with the wide soulful eyes and mother exhausted from child care. . . Our coconut party outside with the machete and a fork and lots of inside jokes. . . Went back inside, distributed truffles, and met Anna, my new Russian friend with the nice accent.

INTRANSIT 24-Aug-07/7:00 AM
I get to use my favorite suggestion. Put it in the blender and hit frappe. It comes across a little too list-like. Blend the people with the foods a bit. There's much to work with here. Please revise.




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