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light [edited] (Haiku) by lmp

yellow-pink rind fades next to morning light's luster upon your soft skin

INTRANSIT 4-Jul-07/7:18 AM
Good on you for sicking with it. I know the facts, but what if you substituted a peach instead. The colors mix better. Grapefruits tend to be more defined. Not to mention it's an acidic fruit. Ah the challenge of haiku.




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