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courtyard (Free verse) by lmp

i often hear: rain splashing upon the rock, the melody echoing off the walls. today: only silence, an eddied dance of white on wind.

lmp 29-Jun-07/3:42 PM
i can accept that the previously posted version of this in the concrete style sucked. i thank those that pointed out the flaws.

while this may not be a better version, necessarily, it is at least more true to the original visceral response to (and memory of) the moment that motivated the penning of these words.

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