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Tropical afternoon (Free verse) by cpill

A wet sky ends another flushed day Letting go of the days hot frustrations Releasing the struggle that started at dawn So one can finally say "I'm done" The race is over. Nobody won. The cool breeze retires ambition Letting the shoulders sag and, put on loose shoes, Smile in the company of others Reflecting at the slow replay of the days events Forever to be frozen in memory Washed in hopes or regrets

cpill 18-Jun-07/4:39 PM
Yes perhaps thats the wrong word to use. I wanted to convey that hot and "flushed" (perhaps a better word than hot) feeling or the end of hard emotion, like I would imagine a female menstruation. An though you feel the sticky wet as a a discomfort its actually like the cold rain at the end of a hot day.




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