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Tropical afternoon (Free verse) by cpill

A wet sky ends another flushed day Letting go of the days hot frustrations Releasing the struggle that started at dawn So one can finally say "I'm done" The race is over. Nobody won. The cool breeze retires ambition Letting the shoulders sag and, put on loose shoes, Smile in the company of others Reflecting at the slow replay of the days events Forever to be frozen in memory Washed in hopes or regrets

Skamper 16-Jun-07/11:29 AM
Maybe it's because I'm a girl - but the first line just seems too repulsive to go with the rest of the write...I don't get the connection. Overall the resignation at what life brings is evident, and painted quite well...




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