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Take-Off (Free verse) by oneglove

I, took a breath And stretched wide my eyes To the furthest ocean In the deepest sky The cresting waves Curled on for days Begging sailor, lay down with me And in the distance mountains soared Alabaster peaks rising high They joined with the sun Letting fingers run On any surface seen Through panes of glass I could clearly see Mount Olympus and Poseidon’s sea The sun kissed my cheek as I wondered aloud In a world so beautiful Why ever come down?

Skamper 14-Jun-07/5:47 PM
You know, I'm not great on titles - in fact can be a bit random with them, but when you write with such dream-like and warm images I think your title should reflect that. It seems a little bland for what you have actually written, which is really good. I like it immensely.




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